#1
Wall flower, wall flower
come and watch it fade by the hour
wall flower, wall flower
expect us all to cower
away
away

Just watch it all fly by
got no one else, so I'll kiss myself goodbye
I have no right to choose
in the end I'll be alone like you

Wall flower, wall flower
give it up you have no power
wall flower, wall flower
wash the guilt away as you shower
away
away

Just watch it all fly by
got no one else, so I'll kiss myself goodbye
I have no right to choose
in the end I'll be alone like you

Wall flower, wall flower
come and watch it fade by the hour
wall flower, wall flower
expect us all to cower
away
away

Wall flower, wall flower
give it up you have no power
wall flower, wall flower
wash the guilt away as you shower
away
away

Just watch it all fly by
got no one else, so I'll kiss myself goodbye
I have no right to choose
in the end I'll be alone like you

Just watch it all fly by
got no one else, so I'll kiss myself goodbye
I have no right to choose
in the end I'll be alone like you
Quote by L2112Lif
I put a ton of my capital into SW Airlines... The next day, THE NEXT DAY these nutters fly into the WTC. What the hell? Apparently no one wanted to fly anymore, and I was like "What gives? God damnit Osama, let me win a fuggin' game!"
#2
Wall flower, wall flower
come and watch it fade by the hour
maybe "her" instead of "it"
wall flower, wall flower
expect us all to cower
really forced rhyme here. a wallflower is a mousy little chick who kinda blends into the background. she isn't gonna have much expectations of others. and definitely wouldn't cause people to cower.
away
away

Just watch it all fly by
got no one else, so I'll kiss myself goodbye
kiss yourself? that's just not right.
I have no right to choose
maybe "no one left to choose". idk
in the end I'll be alone like you

Wall flower, wall flower
give it up you have no power
wall flower, wall flower
wash the guilt away as you shower
the power/shower rhyme could work, but the context isn't really happening.
maybe lament her lack of power instead of telling her to give up
I don't understand why she would have guilt.

away
away

Just watch it all fly by
got no one else, so I'll kiss myself goodbye
I have no right to choose
in the end I'll be alone like you

Wall flower, wall flower
come and watch it fade by the hour
wall flower, wall flower
expect us all to cower
away
away

Wall flower, wall flower
give it up you have no power
wall flower, wall flower
wash the guilt away as you shower
away
away

Just watch it all fly by
got no one else, so I'll kiss myself goodbye
I have no right to choose
in the end I'll be alone like you

Just watch it all fly by
got no one else, so I'll kiss myself goodbye
I have no right to choose
in the end I'll be alone like you



It seems like you've boxed yourself into a far too confining structure. This is all very repetitive. The only variations in the verses are setups for different "our" rhymes. I can't imagine getting something like this to bang hard, when you put that kind of restriction on it.
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#3
It seems to be kind of like a chant. IT was O.K, but needs some work dude.
Like less structured more free.
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#4
Quote by SomeoneYouKnew
Wall flower, wall flower
come and watch it fade by the hour
maybe "her" instead of "it"
wall flower, wall flower
expect us all to cower
really forced rhyme here. a wallflower is a mousy little chick who kinda blends into the background. she isn't gonna have much expectations of others. and definitely wouldn't cause people to cower.
away
away

Just watch it all fly by
got no one else, so I'll kiss myself goodbye
kiss yourself? that's just not right.
I have no right to choose
maybe "no one left to choose". idk
in the end I'll be alone like you

Wall flower, wall flower
give it up you have no power
wall flower, wall flower
wash the guilt away as you shower
the power/shower rhyme could work, but the context isn't really happening.
maybe lament her lack of power instead of telling her to give up
I don't understand why she would have guilt.

away
away

Just watch it all fly by
got no one else, so I'll kiss myself goodbye
I have no right to choose
in the end I'll be alone like you

Wall flower, wall flower
come and watch it fade by the hour
wall flower, wall flower
expect us all to cower
away
away

Wall flower, wall flower
give it up you have no power
wall flower, wall flower
wash the guilt away as you shower
away
away

Just watch it all fly by
got no one else, so I'll kiss myself goodbye
I have no right to choose
in the end I'll be alone like you

Just watch it all fly by
got no one else, so I'll kiss myself goodbye
I have no right to choose
in the end I'll be alone like you



It seems like you've boxed yourself into a far too confining structure. This is all very repetitive. The only variations in the verses are setups for different "our" rhymes. I can't imagine getting something like this to bang hard, when you put that kind of restriction on it.


Alright I'll try changing some of that. I was already thinking of changing the end of the second verse. I'll change the chorus too, cause after you said that I realised that you're right. So I'll change the 'kiss myself goodbye part.
Quote by L2112Lif
I put a ton of my capital into SW Airlines... The next day, THE NEXT DAY these nutters fly into the WTC. What the hell? Apparently no one wanted to fly anymore, and I was like "What gives? God damnit Osama, let me win a fuggin' game!"