#1
When will they all understand
The point in giving in?
Hopeless cases are no reason
To redeem their sin.
If choices make us who we are,
Then please see my solution.
What is wrong with being the martyr
Using mercy’s absolution?

Pre-Chorus:
It’s my pain.
It’s my strife.
They’re my veins.
It’s my life.
It’s not what
You’re thinking.
My life is
Done sinking.

Chorus:
Pardon me if I don’t believe
In faith within myself.
I’ve drifted way too far along
In life for something else.
No life rings go far enough
To bring me back to shore.
There’s no bright light, there’s no salvation
To show me what I’m for.

Should I be quick and subtle
Or have a reminiscent act?
One death leads to another,
Just begging to be tracked.
I have bullets, blades,
A household full of medication.
Meds it is! Declare it heart attack
Instead of my own desecration.

Pre-Chorus 2:
It’s my pain.
It’s my strife.
It’s my heart.
It’s my life.
It’s not what
You’re thinking.
My life is
Done sinking.

Chorus

When someone shows the will
To help my situation,
I want to beg and plead for
Release from degradation.
The lifeline aimed and thrown
To pull me from the pain,
Can I grasp it, save myself
Before I go insane?

Chorus
Some people just wanna watch the world burn. Wanna join me when I take my turn to pour the gas, light the match, see your world flip upside down and drop until it's inside out?
#2
Definitely feeling this man. I liked how it told a story, not just a series of events. You were really able to see this persons train of thought leading to his choice.

Only part i didnt like was the prechorus. Seemed awkward and I feel as if you could do better. Honest, it was just kinda lame. Sorry bromosexual.

Overall good shit.

Thanks for the read. And thanks for the crit on my peice. Keep it up!!
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Last edited by PCADriven at May 31, 2010,
#5
I have nothing to add to this.

Very insightful lyrics that really did explain out a full situation...great job.
#7
Quote by PCADriven
Definitely feeling this man. I liked how it told a story, not just a series of events. You were really able to see this persons train of thought leading to his choice.

Only part i didnt like was the prechorus. Seemed awkward and I feel as if you could do better. Honest, it was just kinda lame. Sorry bromosexual.

Overall good shit.

Thanks for the read. And thanks for the crit on my peice. Keep it up!!


Thanks a lot for your comments. I should probably explain the little pre-chorus a little bit. A lot of the reasons that people would try to commit this act are rather unaccaptable, and to go along with what you said, aukward, which is why I chose to write it that way. It was just another attempt to try and get into the person's head a little more, but thank you for the critique. I really appreciate it.
Some people just wanna watch the world burn. Wanna join me when I take my turn to pour the gas, light the match, see your world flip upside down and drop until it's inside out?