#1
Chorus
This is what you've done
made a fool of everyone
Hope you had fun, cause my love for you is gone
Which path did you take?
Still making the same mistake?
Do what you want, you'll be the one to pay the price

Verse 1
you make me feel dead everytime im with you
like im just something for you to do
your love was never true
its real love you never knew
Lying selfishly feels good doesn't it?
Don't you have conscience or even guilt?
your love was never true
its real love you never knew

Pre-Chorus
your love was never true
its real love you never knew

Chorus
This is what you've done
made a fool of everyone
Hope you had fun, cause my love for you is gone
Which path did you take?
Still making the same mistake?
Do what you want, you'll be the one to pay the price

Verse 2
Just for your own pleasure anyone would do
just like toys, nothing of importance
victim of your stupid plans
this is the end, our final dance

Pre-Chorus
your love was never true
its real love you never knew

Chorus
This is what you've done
made a fool of everyone
Hope you had fun, cause my love for you is gone
Which path did you take?
Still making the same mistake?
Do what you want, you'll be the one to pay the price

Bridge
you make me feel dead everytime im with you
like im just something for you to do
your love was never true
its real love you never knew
Lying selfishly feels good doesn't it?
Don't you have conscience or even guilt?
your love was never true
its real love you never knew

Chorus
This is what you've done
made a fool of everyone
Hope you had fun, cause my love for you is gone
Which path did you take?
Still making the same mistake?
Do what you want, you'll be the one to pay the price
#2
dude with all your songs you don't have enough verse :P
This one is actually pretty good but is the song meant to be about, a unfaithful lover?
Anyway I think it would sound super bad ass and freaky if you end it with

Pre-Chorus
your love was never true
its real love you never knew
... but i guess i'm like that too (big smile)
#4
ahahahaha I'm only being harsh cus I'm a dick :P
It was good, It was good relax its just like early BFMV stuff.
If you have a band and add some good riffing and chorus, this will stand out only about 5% of people actually realise the lyrics, they only know the chorus. SO YOU CAN RELAX.
#5
so ur saying i just need to add more on the verses then it would be good?
#6
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