#1
So here it goes. I just got this song put together... very poorly at that. I know there are a bunch of mistakes, but the rhythm track after about 1:15 or so was completely improvised as far as where all the riffs went, as in, I wrote all the riffs, and just put them together randomly. Also, I haven't put the lead over it yet. All I want to know is what you think of the composition as a whole, and what riffs you think sound out of place, what needs to be changed, etc. The song is called "Unknown" and you can find it in my profile. As normal, C4C.

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#2
Come on

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#3
Quote by RisingForce1990
So here it goes. I just got this song put together... very poorly at that. I know there are a bunch of mistakes, but the rhythm track after about 1:15 or so was completely improvised as far as where all the riffs went, as in, I wrote all the riffs, and just put them together randomly. Also, I haven't put the lead over it yet. All I want to know is what you think of the composition as a whole, and what riffs you think sound out of place, what needs to be changed, etc. The song is called "Unknown" and you can find it in my profile. As normal, C4C.


heres an idea, dont just throw a bunch of shit together. Write it, take alot of time, listen to it a thousand times, if you can, put drums over it, cause it is really hard to judge a song without any rythym to it. Put the lead over it and come back.

Most of the time, you will be lucky if people put in 2% of the effort (that you put into your song) to bother listening to it.

BTW im not being a dick, just some advice. And i skimmed through your song, your a pretty decent player, just put more time into something that you are posting and taking pride in
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#4
I'ts say its "meh" at best... Sorry man way too rushed and quite a few mistakes :S
What is this so called..... Signature?
#5
Nice composition man! The part around 1:50 where the song takes off sounds really great in contrast with the calm riff before it. The part around 4:12 where the time signature changes(Or maybe it was a mess up in timing; I'm not sure which it is) could be a great addition to the song or the opposite depending on how it's used. Adding a drum track may give us a better idea of the song's rhythm.
#6
sweet riffs but def needs some drums and bass to make the song really move with intensity and aggression. i think when the one guitar cuts out it sounds awkward since theres no drum and bass. also don't mix the lead that loud versus the rhythm, hearing the rhythm under the lead is just as important as the lead itself. as far as what sounds "out of place" and all that stuff... thats for you to decide as the writer of the song that is your responsibility and you should take pride in that.

crit mine? https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1317456
Last edited by doofus41 at May 27, 2010,
#7
the intro was a bit too long for my taste but 1:45 onwards was really cool. i agree that some drums and bass should be added, but you're onto something and i think you should continue working on this. good luck!
#8
Thanks everyone for the input. I didn't put a whole lot of effort into the second part of the song because I wasn't sure if I was gonna keep everything after about 1:15. But since it seems to work together I'll get it fixed up and uploaded soon. Unfortunately I don't have the capabilities to put drums to it now, but they shall come soon enough.

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#9
Sorry for the double post, but I just fixed everything up and added the leads. Check out Unknown(2.0)

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