#1
I WON'T GO AND BREAK MY HEART

Still life suits my living room
Nothing changes at all
Got me a new pair of shoes
But that won't make me walk

I stay put, don't know why
To have a reason I'd have to try
Go and break my heart

I just stopped doing the math
Days all blend in one
They all tell me to move on
I ain't even got up

I stay put, don't know why
I won't go and break my heart

I put out my mind and stagger in the dark
But I won't go out and break my heart

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Just a short piece, written just a little while ago; intended for a blues-rockish groovy song (think The Black Keys). I'd just like to get some opinions if it isn't too cliche, if it's catchy, if some lines hit you in a positive way, or in a negative one etc. Actually my first blues-ish lyrics, might be a bit naive and rough but I thought that it's worth sharing it with you to get some advice, cheers!
#3
1) Days all blend in one
They all tell me to move on

Didn't like that line, doesn't flow very well =S

2) But I won't go out and break my heart

The "out" should be used throughout otherwise it makes little sense.

3) Still life suits my living room
Nothing changes at all
Got me a new pair of shoes
But that won't make me walk

Some of the best lyrics I have read from an unsigned writer (=
#5
Quote by zombiak
I usually have a nice idea for the first stanza and kinda rush it afterwards, that's why it may seem pretty rough. Good to hear that the first stanza sounds good, though

It sounds great man. The problem most people have is something amazing occurs to them then they want to get it finished so they can play it asap which means that second or third verses usually take the hit because not enough time is spent on them compared to the first. I find that loads when I'm writing my songs!
Just keep at it, I'd definately want to hear a recorded version if you ever get round to it!