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Hey guys, I'm new to this whole.. UG forum, and I guess I wanted some feedback on a song that I wrote, so without further ado

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[Verse 1:]

You start the storm with your rain dance
Make me drery, if you even can care
I can't believe I met you by chance
That shows that world
I don't have the best of luck


[Verse 2:]

Im hypnotised by your seductive stance
Try to fly out, but you just throw me down to the ground
We can make a renassiance
and it'll show the world
that I don't have the best of luck


[Prechorus:]

& your sway will swing me back to hell
And I can swere that I'm there already
& your momentum will crash me to the ground
I'm shivering, and you're still steady


[Chorus:]

I can't take it, my seams are bursting down
My glory's gone and i'm made to look like a clown
My ears are bursting, and I can't hear a sound
And I can't hear a sound


[Verse 3:]

I've learnt that expectations can't be met
and so you gotta learn to live life without regrets
sometimes, dreams are in black and white
sometimes, theres sound but there ain't no light

[Verse 4:]
One day, when times will be at their best
and we have either passed or failed our tests
We can meet and I will fall at your dance
And I'll be tricked into a poison romance


[Prechorus:]

& your sway will swing me back to hell
And I can swere that I'm there already
& your momentum will crash me to the ground
I'm shivering, and you're still steady


[Chorus:]

I can't take it, my seams are bursting down
My glory's gone and i'm made to look like a clown
My ears are bursting, and I can't hear a sound
And I can't hear a sound


[Prechorus:]

& your sway will swing me back to hell
And I can swere that I'm there already
& your momentum will crash me to the ground
I'm shivering, and you're still steady


[Chorus:]

I can't take it, my seams are bursting down
My glory's gone and i'm made to look like a clown
My ears are bursting, and I can't hear a sound
And I can't hear a sound
Last edited by Dabestile at May 30, 2010,