#1
C4C.

I've read this story before,
I can tell you how it ends.
But that would be a bore,
let's live it all again.


You will be torn up,
wasted and thrown away.
Just an object of lust,
never meant to last a day.

I'm sorry I can't give in,
I'd prefer not to feel.
I have lost too much,
now it's my turn to steal.

I've read this story before,
I can tell you how it ends.
But that would be a bore,
let's live it all again.

I've been bleeding all night long,
but you weren't supposed to know.
Now I've ruined these sheets,
and now I must go.

I'm sorry I can't give in,
but I really tried my best.
I fear it's much too late,
to play close to the vest.

I've read this story before,
I can tell you how it ends.
But that would be a bore,
let's live it all again.

I call you a whore,
because I don't know who else to blame.
You pass out on my floor,
and I pretend to do the same.


I've read this story before,
it only ends in pain.
It ends up on my arms,
scars bearing your name.

I decide it's not worth it,
and convince myself I'm right.
But then I change my mind,
and then I ruin the night.

I've read this story before,
I can tell you how it ends.
But that would be a bore,
let's live it all again.

I call you a whore,
because I don't know who else to blame.
You pass out on my floor,
and I pretend to do the same.


I've read this story before,
I can't help but read it again.
#2
i like it as a whole, also that i felt i related to it somewhat. but the rhyming is a little typical though. i guess i like seeing rhyming when its being stretched some. I especially like how it ends.
Yea that's right, I want something to explode

I've been deaf, now I want noise

LOUD LOVE
#3
This is pretty good, and as said before ^ It is good as a whole, though I must say it's slightly cliche, but only in some areas. It's deffinitely not bad though When I read it i got a Sunrise Avenue kinda vibe for some reason, but yea..For the instrumental part, what do you have in mind?

I like the ending quite much:

"I call you a *****,
because I don't know who else to blame.
You pass out on my floor,
and I pretend to do the same.


I've read this story before,
I can't help but read it again."


I just personally think you should make it a bit less cliche; just a bit. But the idea and the subject of the lyrics is good.

crit?

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