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Not completely amazing, but I like them and have written the music for it, but still have yet to record it well. Plus, I hate my voice and everything needs to be perfect, so it'll take me a while to finish recording.

Simple to think as life just passes you by.
The who, the what, the when, the where, the how and the why.
Most all will take advantage of these things killing we
Such as multi-ton deathtraps, lead flavored treats,
The booze, the weed, the nicotine, the ecstasy, the LSD the PCP and the fungus;
They all deserve respect.
Wish granted, thee.
Recreation has soon turned to danger, then the other way around.
Soon enough this cycle slams the found
And the frolicking, the found and the free,
The found and the ****ers who live off their TVs,
The found and the fagets who cannot live their lives
Without another man to whom they could call their wife.
Now, don't get me wrong, the all deserve respect,
But there's more important things such as gasoline and Beck.
All joking aside, what I'm saying may be mean,
But I'm just a kid; anti-articulate.
Wish granted, thee.
We've debated our enough to go to hell and back;
We're animals, we're humans, we're aliens, we're black.
Everyone has the right answer, but the others are wrong,
So if I'm wrong, then you're wrong, and we're ALL wrong!
I've carried coals to say mine, and you've done the same,
So my opinion; God created life as a game
Because everything is more advanced and everybody doesn't know what happens to them before their time expires...
[BRIDGE]
Wish granted thee, my lord.
We're fascinated my death
And we're gonna kill all the rest.
So what still must we do?
We all must hate you.

To start, I don't have anything against gays (I actually support gay marriage, they could do whatever the hell they want) but what I'm trying to say is that there's more important things to realize.
That's it. The parts that don't rhyme are there to give tension, an uncomfortable feeling-that's what I want to be a part of the song because I see the reality of life as very uncomfortable.
Thank you (and C4C)
FUNK.

My acoustic orginals
My voice isn't that great...but take a listen. I still have yet to perfect my vocals


Sunshine
#2
Alright, this has been overlooked 3 frikkin times. Please critique it, or does it just suck that badly?
FUNK.

My acoustic orginals
My voice isn't that great...but take a listen. I still have yet to perfect my vocals


Sunshine