The one that's just called "The Bridge" sounds better all together. But I like the alternate interpretation one except for the fast picking guitar in the background. That could be taken out and maybe add a chord instead that's the same note and let it ring or find a gentle strumming pattern for it. Just a suggestion.

Check mine out.
definately like the alternate version better, but the original is not bad by any means. Granted, they're both really short, but that's cool, you're just running concepts by us. I agree with jman007 about the picking part in the alternate. It sounds good in places, but maybe if it was buried in the mix a smidge more, it wouldn't distract from your vocals. Speaking of which, the lyrics fit the alt. version better, and I really dug some of the harmonies.

At any rate, it enjoyed both. Just gotta come up with a chorus or a refrain, maybe a bridge, and you really have something there!

"So if 'con' is the opposite of 'pro', then isn't 'congress' the opposite of 'progress'?"
- John Stewart, Daily Show
Personally I'm not a fan of the style of music, so I'll direct my remarks to the recordings themselves. I think you need to spend some time, go back, and improve your guitar tone. The tones in The Bridge were quite harsh and stuck out to my ears. Furthermore, I felt that the alternate version had far to much effect and almost ruined what was otherwise a decent start to a song. Also, I found the alternate picking to be a little annoying in places. However, you do have some solid ideas in there, so I would recomend going back and spending a bit more time reworking your songs.