After the intro with the palm muting and stuff maybe play it once then the second time change it a little to a lower octave instead of playing it again. I was anticipating that when listening to it and expected it to change and not be repeated. Maybe try that. And the guitar is a bit too gritty to me. Nice though in some parts.

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I think that the distortion on the guitar was too much (or just low quality) and it made the the whole recording sound low quality. Maybe that is just your recording equipment? At any rate, I think it was a pretty sweet song. The intro w/ tremolo picking was just a few bars longer than I would have hoped, but other than that I think you had pretty sweet transitions. Keep up the good work, would like to see it w/ vocals despite your complaining

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