#1
I got a real heavy style of song, I have the chorus chant, and the first few lines of the first verse, but I can't seem to think of what else to write. It's done in more of a growl rather than scream or melodic vocal if that helps at all.

F*** you, F*** it all, F*** everything
F*** you, F*** it all, F*** everything
F*** you, F*** it all, F*** everything
F*** you, F*** it all, F*** everything
I'm tired of your f***ing lies, so F*** you

you stepped on my heart like a stepping stone,
now you've left me out here and I'm all on my own


the rest I can't seem to get, so any help would be greatly appreciated
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#2
I'd cut down on the swearing. Especially if you're gonna repeat it that many times. It usually only appeals to 12 year olds that think it makes them cool.
You're = You are
Your = Belongs to you

There = Not here
Their = Belongs to them
They're = They are
Thx.

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#3
Blind Alley. You have to decide if this is an anger song/chant or if its a sad, I-feel-sorry-for-myself no-one-loves-me sort of thing. Its hard to bring both together as they want opposite presentations. The verse lines would suit a boy band, though.
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#4
well, it was written about when I was going through a really messy break up with my ex, and I was pissed off thinking stuff like '**** her' and just sorta came up with the chant. those first two lines sort of lead into why it is that I was pissed off.

as for the ammount of swearing, that was a RATM inspire, was listening to the Triple J hottest 100 of all time, and Killing in the name was on it, so guilty for that :P
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