#1
This is a song I wrote a few months ago, I want to see if I can get any feedback on it, it'd be great.


We're captives in our own dreams,
in our own lives we can't see through each other.
But let me remind you now.

You can't be let down.
Next time it will be more of a breakdown.

You're pacing in a dirt hole,
on the cold grass smothered under your cold nightmares.
The ones you see greeting you every day.

You can't be let down.
Next time it will be more of a breakdown.

To this day I still recall,
the last time you damned us feral.

On this night you lost it all,
waiting in your chains, binding, biding,
to plan your escape from it all.

We're captives in our own dreams,
in our own time we plan each day against each other.
I must recall how.

You weren't let down.
The last time is always the breakdown.

I just recall..
#3
Thank you for your input!
I was just about to toss this song when I thought I'd post it.
Now I know for a fact that I'll use it.