#1
hey, it's your friendly neighborhood pop-punk nut here delivering another complete song that i hope you'll love, it's titled "The Heart That Gets Left Behind" and I wrote it today and I've fallen in love with it. It's catchy, heartfelt and driving. I hope you enjoy it! Critique and I'll return the favor!

salut, c'est moi encore, l'un qui adore le musique pop-punk, et j'ai ecrit un autre chanson complet qui j'espere que t'adore aussi. c'est nommé "The Heart That Gets Left Behind" et je l'ai ecrit aujourd'hui. j'espere que tu l'adore. si tu fait un revue, je le fais un pour toi

LYRICS!:
When you said that I was no good,
you cut me deep inside.
So when I bleed out,
have the courtesy to not cry.

There's a part of me you once held,
Tightly in your grip I'm sure.
And suddenly it's worthless,
you don't want it anymore.

So forgive me if I don't cry
For the heart that gets left behind
I'm sick of all the bullshit
I'm sick of all the lies
So forgive me if I don't cry
For the heart that gets left behind
It was once me who lived it;
And I sure survived.

yeah

Now you're telling me you know why
Nothing ever works for me
And suddenly I realize
You don't know a goddamn thing

So forgive me if I don't cry
For the heart that gets left behind
I'm sick of all the bullshit
I'm sick of all the lies
So forgive me if I don't cry
For the heart that gets left behind
It was once me who lived it;
And I sure survived.

the heart that gets left behind (repeat and fade)
Attachments:
The Heart That Gets Left Behind.gp5
The Heart That Gets Left Behind.mid
#2
why is the "bridge" section serving as the outro?
i think your verse drums should be like this:
hh   |o-o-o-o-|o-o-o-o
snare|----o---|----o--
kick |o-------|o------
      1 2 3 4 |1 2 3 4


also this is straight up emo.../punker than thou
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#3
I don't have guitar pro so I can't look at the music so I'll just give my opinion on the lyrics. They're really great man. I've actually been going through some rough times and your song just summed up what I'm feeling currently. It's real deep. Keep on Rockin!!!