#1
You wake me up at four when you roll over
You tell my friends I snore and keep you up
You're like the dandelion in my bed of clover
You like to leave your toothbrush in my cup

You set the seatbelt lower than my shoulder
You park so that my door's behind the tree
Every day with you, I'm getting older
Don't you feel yet you got revenge on me

I got this feeling I can't seem to get to
I can't believe that you could be my fate
It's not just indigestion
From some moldy bread I ate
This does not sound like love
So it must be hate

I think I must hate everything about you
I can't seem to get you off my mind
I'd only live a quiet life without you
I don't know why I've wasted all this time

I got this feeling I can't seem to get to
I can't believe that you could be my fate
It's not just indigestion
From some moldy bread I ate
This does not sound like love
So it must be hate
#2
Something on your mind, sport? hehe
Yeah awesome though man.
Is it in a slow depressing song format or heavy as fook? lol
#4
Nilchii,
This is great! I can't believe more people haven't commented. You know this song could go on forever. lol. I would really like to hear this song sang to some good bouncy tempoed music. Da, never mind I just saw the "Like This" I left a comment on youtube. Oh, alright. I'll leave one here too: "comment"

Take care,
jodyW
#5
As stated above, this could very well be a tight country piece, but that isn't my area of expertise so...

Good job
#7
I mean, i've heard better rhymes, more daring imagery, fancier wordplay, but at the end of the day I don't really care. this makes a nice song. It's not your best and its silly at times but it doesnt try to be anything more and I like that. Nice job.
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Park that car
Drop that phone
Sleep on the floor
Dream about me