#1
Bird On The Fence

(Verse)
Hey there little Robin sitting on the fence
Whistling at the trees, and it's music to me
Look at all of the trees sway to the song
Think I'll take my guitar and I'll play along

(Chorus)--x2
And I hope I don't get sued for the rights of this
I stole this song from a bird on the fence


(Verse)
Soon my friends gathered to the rhythm and rhymes
I know it's wrong, but I made them think it's mine
I played a few gigs; only family and friends
How much trouble could this song really put me in

(Chorus)--x2
And I hope I don't get sued for the rights of this
I stole this song from a bird on the fence

(Bridge)
Soon that little Robin heard me play his song
He sat on the fence started singing along
What a surprise; I couldn't open my eyes
This is my song that a bird help me write

(Chorus)--x2
And I won't get sued for the rights of this
I wrote this song with a bird on the fence
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#3
I liked it. I was getting a serious folk/acoustic vibe, which im going to assume you were going for. The premise of the song is very fun and whimsicle, and the story progresses very well. The alternate chorus at the end really reflects how times have changed for both the bird and the man, who are obviously the main characters.

Good work man! keep it up! If you get a moment, id appreciate a c4c. Link is in the sig. Thanks!
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#4
Thanx for the crits guys.... my friends and me love playing this song... I wrote it to give the croud a more laid back attitude... and it's a big hit at parties.
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#5
I like it. It's different, in that it seems like a real fun, up beat song. Carefree, happy songs are good too!
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#6
thanx
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my last fail was breaking up with my gf.

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#7
Chords, please?

Really good lyrics and story. I agree with what's been said here.
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#8
this is lighthearted, self-slamming, full of jest and pretty disarming to boot.

I can see why playing this anywhere instantly nets you new fans.

Good stuff!
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