#1
It's repetitive and dark. Gimme a good crit and I'll crit back.
I also am aware you cannot slide from an open string.
EDIT: Forgot to mention, all through the start, there will be various samples playing.
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#2
Thats awesome. You rock.
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#3
parts of it were cool, the only part i didn't really think was doomy or very good was the beginning. Everything after it was really cool.
#4
The start is alright... sounds scary, argh! I think that was what you were going for, so that's cool. The overlapping lead guitar over the top of the chords fits really well, nice use of chromatics - darkens the mood quite a bit.
I particularly like 116, where the semiquavers come in.

One thing - I would suggest introducing that riff (from the start) later on in the piece... maybe bringing it in at the end, to round things off nicely. It's a good riff, that sets the tone nicely for the rest of the piece, and it would be good to hear it again later on

Keep it up!

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#5
Ah! the raging tempo! My desolate sorrow howls from deep inside with virulence against such an abrasively upbeat tempo, slow it down and let the deep emotions run abreast like waves of gloom breaking upon these dark shores!


its not bad, but slow it down to no more than 90 bpm and you have much more doom

some of the melodies are not dark or sad enough for good doom either, write with such sorrow that it makes me want to kill myself . . .
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#6
You've got a point there. I took it down to 80bpm and I think it sounds better.
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#7
for that riff starting at bar 32 i would have the bass play in unison with the kick drum...i think it sounds a lot better
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