#1
All screamed c4c

Strike me down
Destroy this song
Make me believe
That nothing's wrong

Show me that you
Truely have a heart
And prove to me
That I play a part

Why can't I
Believe it's true
Must I die
To believe in you?

In your name
Thousands die
And through your mouth
Speaks a filthy lie

That everything's alright
And everything's okay
But now I have
One thing to say

Your delusional grandeur
Will always be
The death of you
And the death of me

Why can't I
Believe it's true
Must I die
To believe in you?

Once I thought
That I was saved
I know that I
Truely caved

In your smile
And in your eyes
I was decieved
By all your lies

But then i was
Forced awake
And I found out
You Were truely fake

Why can't I
Believe it's true
Must I die
To believe in you?

Strike me down
Destroy this song
Make me believe
That nothing's wrong
#2
Quote by blubolt09
All screamed c4c

Strike me down
Destroy this song
Make me believe
That nothing's wrong


Show me that you
Truely have a heart
And prove to me
That I play a part

Why can't I
Believe it's true
Must I die
To believe in you?

Not liking the first two lines here. Not as much of a flow issue as much as I don't 'see it'.

In your name
Thousands die
And through your mouth
Speaks a filthy lie

Really like this stanza!

That everything's alright
And everything's okay
But now I have
One thing to say

Your delusional grandeur
Will always be
The death of you
And the death of me

I think if you add an 'It' before "Will always be" it might flow better.

Why can't I
Believe it's true
Must I die
To believe in you?

Once I thought
That I was saved
I know that I
Truely caved

In your smile
And in your eyes
I was decieved
By all your lies

But then i was
Forced awake
And I found out
You Were truely fake

I like the premise here but the word 'fake' seems a bit weak for what you're trying to say.

Why can't I
Believe it's true
Must I die
To believe in you?

Strike me down
Destroy this song
Make me believe
That nothing's wrong


I like it quite a bit besides for little things here and there. I like the how it ends the way it starts and how it actually makes sense (the first stanza) by the end.

Overall, great read!
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