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Kind of a punky song. Thought of writing this song whem my friend was listening to billy talent the other day. Been writing bits and peices for a couple weeks now and just cant think of a bridge. So any input to help what i already have or any ideas would be appriciated. C4C


Verse


So lay there darling and ill lull you to sleep
with this sonnet I sing, so filled with madness.
Please lay there quietly and dare not make a peep for this worlds far already to loud.

I'm comprehending just what I should do next
Take a well deserved rest
Or maybe not, whatever works dear.


Chorus

I see the writing on the walls
No need to explain to me
I see the hate inside the hearts of millions

Seven days of hellish fire
Round and round it starts again
No need to listen darling
No need to listen I swear

Verse

Outside your window i start to hear the wind blow
Leaves start falling from a tree, and then start to crumble.
Waking so softly you have yet to even know
Inside your eyes you've drawn a crowd

I'm comprehending just what I should do next
Try to clean up this mess
Or maybe not, whatever works dear.


Chorus

I see the writing on the wall
No need to explain to me
I see the hate inside the hearts of millions

Seven days of hellish fire
Round and round it starts again
No need to listen darling
No need to listen I swear


Bridge
There is a saying in poetry, "show me, don't tell me." here you are announcing everything, like an announcer to a sporting event. "Dave has the ball. Dave passes the ball. Dave picks his ass."

~Zanascross

XD epic win
Last edited by NOTAFOX at Jun 18, 2010,