#1
This song still needs alot of work. This is my first draft. I am having trouble coming up with a chorus, but the verses came easily. Let me know what you think. Also, give me some ideas, that would be appreciated. Also, I am open to criticism.


1st verse (nice and slow)
this will be the last time i will say goodbye to you
i can only hope i will make it through the day
feeling myself tear apart, i repeat it over and over
this is the only way

(picks up a little here)
i've known this day was coming sooner or later
my world has been crashing down and it soon will be done
i hope inside that you don't feel as bad as i do right now
i wouldn't wish this on anyone

(No chorus at the moment, but the chorus will be softer, much like the verse)

2nd verse (becomes heavy and distorted at end of third line)
this will be the last time i will ever see your face
i can only hope i can move on from this pain
feeling myself breaking down, i scream it over and over
this is the only way!

(Still no chorus)
(No bridge either, possibly a guitar solo)

3rd verse (nice and slow again)
this will be the last time i will walk away from you
i know that i won't last much longer
feeling myself coming to an end, i whisper it over and over
this is the only way
#3
no not exactly, but i can see how you would think that. what do you mean by something missing though?
#6
I like this. I am going through something that this song is close to. It makes me think of my girlfriend and what me and her are going through.