#1
First off, before you start reading and judging my lyrics there are a few things I want to tell you.

I'm sixteen years old, this is the first full set of lyrics I have ever written in my entire life, I'm from Sweden so in English I only have experince from school, TV, the internet etc. So first off I want you to rate the lyrics on a scale from 1 to 10 based on the things I just so recently told you. After that I want you to rate them from 1 to 10 as you would do with anyone else, so that I can get a grasp of how far i have to go to become a decent lyrics writer. (They aren't written in the actuall structure btw)

So here it comes...

It's hard running a marathon, have you ever run a marathon Johanna?

VERSES 1-3

Do you remember those good old times
when we used to run in the fields
you where chasing butterflies
while I was stumbling through my lies

Had not found my heart yet
after I lost it on the way here
I have always recognized
all the things that you did for me

You will never know how much you meant to me
all I see is your vanity
And now I stand on my own two feet
My soul is no longer incomplete

CHORUS

Life is not all about misery
it's up to you if you want to be free
All this would sometimes seem
as it just was part of one big dream
I wasted years before I faced my fears
But I won't spend time on another tear
All that matters are those who to me are dear

CHEESY FINALE THINGY

This life won't get the best of me
#2
It's kinda cheesy, but most love songs are. The chorus ain't bad, but you can't get a good judgment just by posting lyrics, because the way they are sung and melody is also a key element. Why don't you turn it into recorded music and post it?