#1
Hey, I have just made my first song, its pretty crap but I want to hear some opinions on. I haven't given it a name yet and it not really finished. It goes intro -> verse -> chorus -> verse -> outro. You can't really hear the chorus very well because it is similar to the verses. You can hear it on my profile I think. I think it might go quite well if there was vocals and other instruments playing. Any feedback will be welcomed as I'm quite new to playing the guitar and will help me in the long run, thanks
#2
i like the weird intr/outro a lot. not sure what it has to do musically with the next part though. it feels really boring and repetitive for the most part, but that's just because you haven't really fleshed it out with other instruments and vocals.

if you're going to write more riffs and stuff, i think it'd be cool to incorporate some of the weird dissonant stuff from the intro here and there to keep the chord progession from getting stale. sort of like the verses of the sweater song by weezer, for lack of a better comparison.

keep it up!
#4
Those were nice chords, which ones were they? they sounded slightly haunting and very dark
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American Strat (Modded with Kinman Pickups and more )
PRS Paul Allender (Don't like Cradle of Filth though )
Line 6 Spider Valve 212 (Broken )
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#5
Quote by SeriousMan
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#6
Is it an effect you had on your computer, or just a bad microphone? Becaus I'd like to use that once, sounds a bit like a part of a soundtrack from a film.

Anyway, it sounds pretty cool. Be more precise on the timing of the chord shifts though, you should have a girl with a nice voice (something like Alison Mosshart fx?) singin over it, unless you too, of course, sing

Here's something she's done with her mainband The Kills:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gcCZ6-lC2sw

Edit: +1 above
#7
Quote by Zolabloony
Hey, I have just made my first song, its pretty crap but I want to hear some opinions on. I haven't given it a name yet and it not really finished. It goes intro -> verse -> chorus -> verse -> outro. You can't really hear the chorus very well because it is similar to the verses. You can hear it on my profile I think. I think it might go quite well if there was vocals and other instruments playing. Any feedback will be welcomed as I'm quite new to playing the guitar and will help me in the long run, thanks

high-five for being a male born in 1993 in the south of the united kingdom you're now my bro, brofive! sorry im bored and got sidetracked and i can't be asked to push that backspace key all the way over there, anyway, pretty damn good for your first song we all love high-fives
I'm like a black Dr. Who, Except I'm white

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#9
few things: liked the reverse playback in the intro. simple chord structure, but as you said it's your first song. you're having problems fully hitting the chords, so i'd suggest taking of the finger that's giving you the most problems and work it slowly. then add it in but take it at a slower tempo and make sure you're getting the full chord sound. also, don't be afraid to switch up the strum pattern. work on both down and up strumming to give the song a bit more motion. keep it up and practice hard and you'll be improving in no time!

crit?

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1327819
#10
Thanks for all of your feedback. I will try to make it a little bit more interesting changing the chord structure a little and the strumming pattern, also maybe adding a bit of a solo.

Also @cheesecake it was an effect on the computer and I would love Alison Mosshart to sing to it
#11
I loved the intro dude. And your chords are good, however I'm not sure if the intro is in the same key as the verse. But it's pretty good dude! Keep up practicing!!!
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Digitech RP55
#12
Great for a beginner guitarist - good chords, I strongly suggest pulling out a metronome and hitting a chord no the first beat, then another on the second until you can switch between them at a fast pace. Also Less mic boost more amp volume for buzz issues. It has potnential, the better you get the better it will get, practice with a metronome so you can start feeling the rythm that you want and incorporate it into your playing. At an early level of playing guitar it is actually vital that you use a metronome so that it trains your ears to hearing rythms and utilizing timing. Rock uot som exercises to get your fingers going! Check out this post https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1332569 use the scales and chromatics to boost your ability to move your fingers the way you want to not the way "they are comfortable". Your enthusiasm is great - posting your song is a great way to get opinions on your musical abilities as well as your technical abilities on guitar.

Crit?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1332054
-or-
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1331822
#13
Quote by Silvanarix
Great for a beginner guitarist - good chords, I strongly suggest pulling out a metronome and hitting a chord no the first beat, then another on the second until you can switch between them at a fast pace. Also Less mic boost more amp volume for buzz issues. It has potnential, the better you get the better it will get, practice with a metronome so you can start feeling the rythm that you want and incorporate it into your playing. At an early level of playing guitar it is actually vital that you use a metronome so that it trains your ears to hearing rythms and utilizing timing. Rock uot som exercises to get your fingers going! Check out this post https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1332569 use the scales and chromatics to boost your ability to move your fingers the way you want to not the way "they are comfortable". Your enthusiasm is great - posting your song is a great way to get opinions on your musical abilities as well as your technical abilities on guitar.

Crit?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1332054
-or-
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1331822


Thanks for the feedback, I didn't really do any timing when doing this so that's probably why the timing is probably a bit off Also thanks for the link, I will try it.