#1
havent posted a song here in a looong time, so here goes.
tell me what you think of it, c4c as always.

version 2: changed some parts, added a lead guitar.
Attachments:
new song.gp5
new song v2.gp5
Last edited by <<f1sh3r>> at Jun 22, 2010,
#2
hey man here's my crit

Intro:
Good way to start a song , great riff imo.

Pre-Verse:
good transition from intro to pre-verse with the power chords. though i dont understand why bar 7 is at 90 tempo , makes it a little odd.

Verse:
Its ok , but the drums somehow dont sound right.

Pre-Chorus:
Again ok , nothing special , i expected something a little more "creative"
Little basic its good enough and it fits with the rest.

Chorus:
Good and bad , liked that you used the intro for the Chorus but i dont feel like its chorus material , and the drums got a little hectic.

Bridge:
Again cinda basic , same thing but slower and it doesnt really build up well to the intro riff imo.

All in all i can say that it has good potential , cinda got a maiden vibe out of it , but it just feels like it needs some more work and maybe some rewriting of certain parts. and i really missed a melodic lead guitar , but thats just my cind of taste.

anyway keep it up and this might turn out a lot better than it is !

7/10

Could you crit The Holy Crusade for me ? its in my sig thx.
#3
not bad at all,

i just have a small comment, the verse riff sounds like the riff from Travel in Stygian by Iced Earth

edit: i dont like to rate midi because it usually makes the song sound different, and i cant really judge a song without vocals, except instrumentals of course, and i dont think this is going to be an instrumental, is it??

can you please check my songs:
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1327004
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Last edited by d(^o^)b at Jun 22, 2010,
#4
thanks for the crits guys, i made a few changes and added lead guitar.
its still a long way from done but its getting there.

@d(^o^)b i do write lyrics, but i dont think i have any that would fit this song well. i do intend on actually having lyrics though. eventually.

please listen to this version, if not both. thanks!
Attachments:
new song.gp5
#5
not a real crit, but ya the second version sounds better to me, i am not generally a big fan of metalcore, which is what i am assuming is the direction you are going for, some of the leads are a little lame

if you are going to crit another one of my songs, i hope you check either biting the bullet or mesong
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