#1
Influenced by Four Year Strong, and the film/book Fight Club. I've included the structure, for ease of reading.


ONE HELL'UVA HEARTBREAK

INTRO

VERSE 1

Only after disaster,
Can we be ressurrected.
With our heads held high,
Let's take on the world tonight.

PRE CHORUS

With everything to lose,
Would you have a different point of view?
With nothing more to gain,
knowing you'll never see her face again.

CHORUS

Always on the brink of bliss,
But never quite over the egde,
One more chance to save myself,
I'll make my solemn pledge.
Would you live your life the same,
If you knew that death was hours away
homing in on hopeless souls,
Lets punch the pain away.

INTRO

VERSE 2

Only after a heartbreak,
can we finally say,
Thats all that I've got left to give.
Why can't I just fade away?

PRE CHORUS

With everything to lose,
Would you have a different point of view?
With nothing more to gain,
knowing you'll never see her face again.

CHORUS

Always on the brink of bliss,
But never quite over the egde,
One more chance to save myself,
I'll make my solemn pledge.
Would you live your life the same,
If you knew that death was hours away
homing in on hopeless souls,
Lets punch the pain away. (LET ME HEAR YOU SAY...)

BRIDGE (GANG CHANT)

Lets evolve,
Let the chips fall where they may.
Lets pretend,
We've got enough left for another day X2, just drums

Lets evolve,
Let the chips fall where they may.
Lets pretend,
We've got enough left for another....DAY! X2, plus instruments BUILDING UP

BREAKDOWN

CHORUS

Always on the brink of bliss,
But never quite over the egde,
One more chance to save myself,
I'll make my solemn pledge.
Would you live your life the same,
If you knew that death was hours away
homing in on hopeless souls,
Lets punch the pain away.

OUTRO (WITH REPEATS OF "LETS PUNCH THE PAIN AWAY!")

ENDING

Any opinions welcome

Bryn
xx
#2
I liked it a lot, and I think the gang chant is well implemented.

PS. Well, I suppose I should give some sort of advice or something, but I just wanted to let you know I enjoyed it
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Squier Affinity Jazz Bass
Fender Rumble 15
Last edited by Imikulate at Jun 21, 2010,