#1
When all is lost even the horizon,
Travel to the edge of darkness,
But don't fall in,
Satans' smile burns your soul,
But the sun will rise again,

Held by Broken Chains,
The world is set aflame,
To free it frome someone,
Who never had any power at all,
So who's to blame?,

Led by a dark fire,
With no desire for paradise,
They're following his lies,
You can't see tommorow,
But you know the world will burn,

Held by Broken Chains,
The world is set aflame,
To free it from someone,
Who never had any power at all,
So who's to blame?,

When the sun sets,
And fails to rise again,
Angels sing, the raptures about to begin,
And the world is purged of hate,
for them: it was too late.
Last edited by theft92 at Jun 24, 2010,
#3
I like it. Not much too put down but there is a spelling error. Fourth Stanza, third line - frome instead of from. Overall great read.

Held by Broken Chains,
The world is set aflame,
To free it frome someone,
Who never had any power at all,
So who's to blame?,

When the sun sets,
And fails to rise again,
Angels sing, the raptures about to begin,
And the world is purged of hate,
for them: it was too late.


I really liked these two Stanzas by the way

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#5
Some nice ideas here, maybe a little cliched overall but pulled off well nonetheless. I'd maybe suggest some less obvious alternatives for the verbs of the sun (rise, set etc) but I could definitely imagine this working on a slow and heavy song.