#1
I don’t want this anymore;
I hate what I’ve become…
I can’t stand that I need this;
it just feels so wrong…


Part of me depends on you,
Yet the rest can’t take it,
Five thousand leagues separate,
Our minds apart, yet
We’re so alike,
It makes me sick,
That I can’t breathe without you there,
This is your last chance…


I don’t want this anymore;
I hate what I’ve become…
I can’t stand that I need this;
it just feels so wrong…

I thought you were there for me,
I guess I was misled…
I wish I could cut you out,
But I just can’t take this…


I’ll keep it beneath my skin,
Grit my teeth and try,
To make it work for your good,
I don’t want to break this,
Friendship forever,
‘Cause I don’t like this,
The fact you’ve changed me so,
You changed me… And…


I don’t want this anymore;
I hate what I’ve become…
I can’t stand that I need this;
it just feels so wrong…

I thought you were there for me,
I guess I was misled…
I wish I could cut you out,
But I just can’t take this…

I just can’t take you…
Anymore…

*solo*
*post-solo – cool-down*

I don’t want this…
What I’ve become…
I can’t stand this…
It’s just so wrong….


I try so hard to keep it cool,
But you just take the piss…
You just take advantage,
Of what I have to give…
A thousand times I’ve told you now,
I can’t see you the same…
Is it me or is it you,
I’m not sure who’s changed…


I don’t want this anymore;
I hate what I’ve become…
I can’t stand that I need this;
it just feels so wrong…

I thought you were there for me,
I guess I was misled…
I wish I could cut you out,
But I just can’t take this…
Anymore… No…

I just can’t take this…
I just can’t take you…
I just won’t take this…
I just wont take you…
Anymore…
#2
I’ll keep it beneath my skin,
Grit my teeth and try,
To make it work for your good,
I don’t want to break this,
Friendship forever,
‘Cause I don’t like this,
The fact you’ve changed me so,
You changed me… And…

how would you sing this? Cus It is not very clear what it means with the strange order of words.
btw the rest is i think quit good (I dont have a lot off experience) but i like it and I think it will sound powerfull with the verse, also I think long fading notes with a lot of emotion wil sound good before the verse (these things like that .....And.... (see quote)) . Just my oppinion (oppinnion from a noob)
#4
This one was slightly confusing. I wasn't entirely sure if it was supposed to be hopeful or condemning. The best thing I could say is go back to the first couple verses and revise the wording just to keep the same feel through its entirety. Apart from that slight confusion, I have to admit that it's not a bad effort whatsoever. Keep on creating and don't let anything discourage you from it.

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#5
overall pretty cliched lyrics, nothing too memorable, but it drives directly to the heart in it's simplicity. I can see how people will relate to this, especially if it's alt rock. It thus falls upon the instruments to make the song stand out a bit more from the crowd.
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#6
I wrote it about someone who used to be one of my closest friends, he lived with me for 6 months until i got put on bail and had to go and live with my dad. I wrote it shortly before he moved out; but I didn't see him for who he really was until recently. He ruined my relationships, and changed me for the worse.

And in regard to singing it; I based it around Thousand Foot Krutch and 3 Doors Down.

edit:
It was going to me more intstrumental based to drive the point in, yeah. :P