This isn't really finished yet but I'd appreciate some opinions and such. :3

If I stand right next to the ocean,
I can still hear you breathe.
The silence brings me in so well,
oh I wish you were here with me.
I've learned a lot in seventeen years, you see.
But what I remember most is how much you love me.
So I took my heart and poured it out on these six strings,
so you can know how much you mean to me.