#3
@ 1:00

" Tell me what to do when my arms turn blue " I laughed at that part. It's a good line you should expand on it dude. I think hamonica is overated but violin would be sick to have. I noticed you added a lead to match the vocals in some parts. You need to work on that lead more it seems out of place. Other than that I would listen to you. You seem like the type of guy that would write comedy and has that awkward factor somewhere. I could be 100% wrong though. Keep it up!

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Please crit my acoustic song

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1333750
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#4
Quote by transplants182
I listened the first acoustic song and it does sound pretty good. You seem to have the songwriting aspect down.

The only thing was the vocals were a bit hard to hear, but I understand it's only a demo.

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https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1334201

Oh your song is pretty cool, a little rough in the recording of it, but pretty good all around. the intro is pretty good.
#5
Quote by Jonathan Trejo
@ 1:00

" Tell me what to do when my arms turn blue " I laughed at that part. It's a good line you should expand on it dude. I think hamonica is overated but violin would be sick to have. I noticed you added a lead to match the vocals in some parts. You need to work on that lead more it seems out of place. Other than that I would listen to you. You seem like the type of guy that would write comedy and has that awkward factor somewhere. I could be 100% wrong though. Keep it up!

C4C?

Please crit my acoustic song

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1333750


it's good, real mellow, and intense, it's a great buildup to the distortion part at the end.