#1
Grasp my hand tighter,
You will let go today,
And now the memories,
Seem so closed away,

You took away and left for good,
And then I'll do what I should,

And I walk the miles,
To see your face again,
Just to see you sleeping,
Alone and scared,
I'll read those letters,
Beside your bed,
And then I'll know,
You cared,

Just to hear your voice,
An angelic sound of yours,
It's all I ever wanted from you,
And the end of the pain caused,

And I walk the miles,
To see your face again,
Just to see you sleeping,
Alone and scared,
I'll read those letters,
Beside your bed,
And then I'll know,
You cared,

I'll read those letters,
To know you cared,

Grasp my hand tighter,
You won't let go,
Grasp my hand tighter,
You won't let go,
Grasp my hand tighter,
You won't let go,
Grasp my hand tighter,
We won't let go today,

And I walk the miles,
To see your face again,
Just to see you sleeping,
Alone and scared,
I'll read those letters,
Beside your bed,
And then I'll know,
I'll know that you cared,

And I walk the miles,
To see your face again,
Just to see you sleeping,
Alone and scared,
I'll read those letters,
Beside your bed,
And then I'll know,
I'll know that you cared,

You cared.

First lyrics I'v written for a song and just wondering what everyone though any replies would be helpful, thanks
* If my punctuation seems off, it's because my shift button is broken *
#2
Pretty good
Guitars:
-Gibson Les Paul Custom Shop Silverburst (Invader/'59)
-Ovation ApplauseAE44II Elite Black Acoustic


Amps/Cabs
-Peavey 6505+ Head
Orange PPC2x12 Cab Black
-Behringer Ultracoustic ACX450 1x8 Acoustic Combo


Wayyyyy too many effects pedals...
#3
Quote by MusicMan24
Pretty good

ya, especially seeing its your first attempt at writing lyrics for a song
#4
What kind of tempo are you thinking of for this? I imagine it slow with an acoustic guitar in which case I would repeat whole stanzas quite so much. Overall the song itself is pretty good (prob bout a 6 outa 10) in my opinion. One thing I might suggest is to end on a more broken up version of the last stanza just so that it doesn't seem to samey.
#5
Quote by unp-ben
What kind of tempo are you thinking of for this? I imagine it slow with an acoustic guitar in which case I would repeat whole stanzas quite so much. Overall the song itself is pretty good (prob bout a 6 outa 10) in my opinion. One thing I might suggest is to end on a more broken up version of the last stanza just so that it doesn't seem to samey.

I've got it at 80 BPM might put it a bit slower tbh so yeah it is a very slow song
* If my punctuation seems off, it's because my shift button is broken *