#1
unfortunately i hit a bit of writers block after starting these...
PLEASE GIVE ME A REVIEW ON THESE
or suggestions, tips, etc.
song titles are in bold.


Leaving You
You can take this as my official resignation,
I'm filled to the top with indignation.
You've abused me with all this humiliation,
Now what's your explanation?
What was your expectation?
What was your motivation?

I can tell you that this is the last of my goodbyes
You've told me no way too many times.
I'm sick of all your exaggerations and lies.
Now, tell me, what's behind your eyes?
What's behind your disguise?
What are you trying to rationalize?

Don't come looking for me after I've left,


ENERGY!!!
Monster, Rockstar, Amp, Red Bull
I'll drink em all till I'm full.
I don't care if its in a bottle in a can,
it really doesn't matter I won't give a damn.

Limit to 2 cans per day?
F--- it! what do i say?
I say drink em all
Java Monster, NOS, and Bawls

Looking for some energy


Love Me for a Day
If you could see into my heart
You'd see just what I thought
I'm sure you'd find some way,
Some Way to love me for a day

If you could perhaps find a way,
Even if it's just for a single day
To give me one more chance
One more, that's all I ask


In the End
I wish I could tell you whats on my mind
But I'm afraid of what you'll find
I wish I could tell you I want you to be mine
But I'm afraid of what I'll leave behind

Sometimes I feel like you ignore me on purpose
Sometimes I feel like you hate me with prejudice
And Sometimes I feel as if you've regressed
But in the end I know I'm just depressed

You're gone, gone forever, never to return
You're just another page, in this book I'll burn
For now you're nothing but a new lesson learned
In the end, you'll still be gone, and I'll have my turn
Last edited by Seanstrom at Jul 9, 2010,
#2
You're All I've Got - consider changing title, generic
If you could see my into my heart - remove first "my"
You'd see just what I thought
I'm sure you'd find some way
Some Way to love me for a day
Come on, give me chance you're all I've got - rewrite

I'm hearing this one with kind of an Incubus vibe. Sounds good in my head.
Last edited by jfreyvogel at Jul 9, 2010,
#3
Quote by jfreyvogel
You're All I've Got - consider changing title, generic
If you could see my into my heart - remove first "my"
You'd see just what I thought
I'm sure you'd find some way
Some Way to love me for a day
Come on, give me chance you're all I've got - rewrite

I'm hearing this one with kind of an Incubus vibe. Sounds good in my head.


thanks man. i didn't even notice that double my up there in the first line. haha
and I didn't really have any idea for how it was gonna be sung yet.
the kids i play music with are into like Grunge, souther rock and bluegrass, as well as country, and some hard rock.
so it'd probably sound interesting
#5
ENERGY!!!
Monster, Rockstar, Amp, Red Bull
I'll drink em all till I'm full.
I don't care if its in a bottle in a can,
it really doesn't matter I won't give a damn.

Limit to 2 cans per day?
F--- it! what do i say?
I say drink em all
Java Monster, NOS, and Bawls

this would be a nice chorus:

I say give em all to me
I'm looking for some energy
for ****'s sake give em all to me
I'm looking for some energy