Not bad I like the intro It needs to be cleaned up and polished, maybe some vocals will help make things more interesting :P The recording quality isn't too great, but that's to be expected from a camera, so don't worry about it. Around the 1:28 there is an odd transition between that threw me off a bit heh. But otherwise keep it up!
The intro riffs sound sharp: that was the best part I think. After that it sounds OK, but needs some vocals to keep it interesting. Your a young guy, keep at it!