#1
*Verse*
Those were the days
that we once knew,
Of what would become
of the many and few,

Oh how we've changed
in these past years,
Just the thought of the future
would bring us to tears,

Now I hand you a gift
i have prepared
with the money i know
we should have shared,

You served me well
but i must move on
as I've got things to do
before I am gone,

*Chorus*
Sinning and lieing
while fighting and crying,
they're the action that've
made us who we are,

Take your chances and
don't think twice,
You only live once so
go for your life,

*Verse*
Spinning 'round like a hurricane,
dancing through the wicked flames,

Life twists and turns
with no end in sight,
No comforting smile
worthy of this constant fight,

Embrace the world around you,
Make sure to open up and see
what she has on offer for you
and the places you should be,

*Chorus*
Sinning and lieing
while fighting and crying,
they're the action that've
made us who we are,

Take your chances and
don't think twice,
You only live once so
go for your life,

*Bridge*
Hide away with you back
against the shadows,
we no longer care of what you've become,

You missed out on your chances
so step aside and hope to god
that you get somewhere,

*Chorus*
Sinning and lieing
while fighting and crying,
they're the action that've
made us who we are,

Take your chances and
don't think twice,
You only live once so
go for your life,

Cheers,
TheAscendant
#2
I really like the chorus. "Sinning and lieing while fighting and crying" sounds like something you can just yell at the top of your lungs, almost like a chant lol. The two lines after that, "they're the actions that've made us who we are" feels a little weak though. I think if you shorten it a bit, it could go a long way. Overall, good song. Feels like a really high-energy song to me.
#3
I agree alot with what @tticus said about this being a "high energy song". For some reason, I get a feeling of Rise Against reading this. Is that accurate? I dont have anything to critique really, but in the chorus i think it flows better if instead of saying "You only live once/ so
go for your life" you said "You only live once/ so go for life". I like this song a lot good job!
#4
i really like this! i dont have any problem with the last line of the chorus i mean i dont see how it doesnt flow!! sry no critque for this piece, its great, keep on writing
Roses are red
Violets are blue
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