#1
Earlier this evening, I was spacing out kind of hard with my guitar. Then this melody popped in my head, so I just started building on it. Just a keyboard/synth and a couple guitars so far. Also, just the intro since I got writers block now. So only a 32 measure intro for now. Anyway, just figured I'd post this and see what some people thought.

The name of the tune is just a working title for now. I was imagining myself sitting in a tipi and staring into the smoke of a fire and faces started forming in the smoke. Hence the title. Anyway, enough blabbering .
Attachments:
smokey faces.zip
AMP:
5150 combo
GSP1101 + Tech 21 PE60

GUITARS:
ESP LTD M-255 w/ SD Full Shred
Kramer Vanguard w/ JE-1000 active preamp
Douglas WF-150sn w/ GFS "Hot Lead" set

EFFECTS:
Bos SD-1 (boost)
AMT DT-2

My Youtube Vids http://youtube.com/user/mogar
#2
Nice, I could only use the MIDI but it's kinda like Lord of the Rings Music meets metal/rock. You may want to look into Howard Shore...

I really like the guitar's presence in the song (especially at the start), but I think the arpeggio is a little repetitive, or you might just want to try a different instrument or lower the volume. I would really like to hear a finished version of this though.

C4C?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1338391
Guitars & Gear:
Parker Nitefly M
Sumer Metal Driver
Ibanez RGD2120Z
AMT SS-11B
Two Notes Torpedo CAB
#3
Yeah, it is kind of repetitive, but it is still a work in progress. The verse riff will probably just have some synth chords going over it, but I still don't know for sure.
AMP:
5150 combo
GSP1101 + Tech 21 PE60

GUITARS:
ESP LTD M-255 w/ SD Full Shred
Kramer Vanguard w/ JE-1000 active preamp
Douglas WF-150sn w/ GFS "Hot Lead" set

EFFECTS:
Bos SD-1 (boost)
AMT DT-2

My Youtube Vids http://youtube.com/user/mogar
#4
Something else you might want to look at:
Ennio Morricone - Man With A Harmonica

Also, take a look at Muse's live version
Guitars & Gear:
Parker Nitefly M
Sumer Metal Driver
Ibanez RGD2120Z
AMT SS-11B
Two Notes Torpedo CAB
#5
I like this intro! It has heaps of potential to be a prog masterpiece IMO.

Just a few things I would change about it.

When your lead guitar harmony comes in at bar 12, I reckon you could have done so much more over all with it, don't get me wrong, it sounded great but I think it could sound better if you didn't have them playing the exact same rhythm, it's a tad cliche to have that happening. Instead, since this piece is quite ambient IMO, you could have one guitar playing the already existing rhythm in the lead and have the other playing one that's similar but add extra notes, sort of like writing counter point but using many suspensions to lead the piece forward. I reckon you could do this especially well from bars 15-16. Also, I think the lead guitars could do with a bit of a delay effect if possible, especially the first melody.

Rhythmically, this was a bit of a letdown, I do like the continuous arpeggios in the harps, it drove the piece forward but having both of the rhythm guitars play straight semi quavers was a bit too much too early IMO. Instead, I would change the 2nd rhythm guitar up a bit to contrast the arpeggios and first rhythm guitar. I'm also a bit disappointed this is lacking a drum beat, I'm not sure whether that was your intention or you couldn't find a suitable beat but this would go really well with some post rock style drumming IMO with all those high hat fills and syncopation.


Overall, I enjoyed this, I see great potential in this one so keep working at it!

Could you please crit mine?

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1338275
#6
It's nice but works only as intro. More lead guitars and synths to make it more intresting ? Just giving ideas. And uhh.. It's hard to say anything since you had only synth and guitars in this piece. Finish it and then put it here again .
#7
Quote by xbitmetal
It's nice but works only as intro. More lead guitars and synths to make it more intresting ? Just giving ideas. And uhh.. It's hard to say anything since you had only synth and guitars in this piece. Finish it and then put it here again .



Yeah, I'm still working on this and adding more parts everyday. I'll post an update to this once I put a little more work into it.
AMP:
5150 combo
GSP1101 + Tech 21 PE60

GUITARS:
ESP LTD M-255 w/ SD Full Shred
Kramer Vanguard w/ JE-1000 active preamp
Douglas WF-150sn w/ GFS "Hot Lead" set

EFFECTS:
Bos SD-1 (boost)
AMT DT-2

My Youtube Vids http://youtube.com/user/mogar