#1
Mother,
your on your own.
I've tried my best to help you,
now your chances are blown
Mother
your on your own,
but i still love you
Mother
your on your own (from here on out)
And i didn't mean, i didn't mean to cause you pain

Soon I'll
be on my way
Alone in the sea, a kite in a tree of deception
And i''l try
To find my way
Day after day, day after day
Without your help

Mother,
your on your own
I've tried my best to save you,
now your children have grown
Mother,
your on your own (and that's alright)
Cause i didn't mean, i didn't mean to drive you insane

Soon I'll
be on my way
Alone in the sea, a kite in a tree of deception
And i''l try
to find my way
Day after day, day after day
without your help

Mother,
I know i let you down
I know i hurt you but I'm movin' on

Soon I'll
be on my way
Alone in the sea, a kite in a tree of deception
And i''l try
To find my way
Day after day, day after day
Without your help



The concept should be obvious having tried a more direct approach to this piece, if not then speak up. I don't usually put this much repetition in my lyrics but hopefully it'll make an impact.

Oh, and C4C will be given to everything and everyone that comments below.
#2
I like this, in the vein of Mother/Father songs where you acknowledge that they've hurt you, and you've hurt them back, not just chastising them for something.

My only criticism is the "chances are blown" - it seems like a more casual turn of phrase than the rest of the lyrics are, so I might try to go with something that fits better with the tone of the song. But that's just my interpretation of what the tone of the song is, so maybe the way you're envisioning it it fits perfectly.

The repetition is definitely a good thing, in this style of song. I thought, initially, of "Good Woman" by Cat Power, in terms of musical style, slow-paced with repetition.

Good stuff!

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