#1
Im not much of a song writer. I like the Offspring and I feel this is something like what they would sing. Didnt take too long to write, maybe it shows.

She'll Sleep With Anyone But Me

Here’s a thing or two I’ve learned about girls,
Doesn’t matter if you’re nice or give them the world
Took a while but I am living proof
In order to sleep with one you’ve got to be a douche

My girlfriend with sleep with anyone but me
She finds a reason to keep putting off the deed
I’m not stupid, I’m not dense
Guess its true nice guys that finish last

She used to sleep with all sorts of guys
None like me; they were ripped
But wouldn’t give her the time
Past giving her the D

My girlfriend slept with everyone
I’m alone and I just want some fun
She’s with me ‘cause I am not a risk
I won’t force or pressure her for sex

[Verse 1]

I've got to step up my game
I've got to see why she acts tame
I've got to be a bit more aggressive and tell her what I want
Or else she'll end up cheating and I'll end up being hurt

My girlfriend - three times
Well, I guess you've got to be a douche

C4C
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#2
there's some grammer mistakes in there man (or spelling)

like :


My girlfriend with sleep with anyone but me

or

Guess its true nice guys that finish last.


Overall, its pretty nice.

More blink 182 than the offspring though, they dont sing about girlfriends. B182 does :p
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#3
Self Esteem, bro!
Plus, I dont like Blink too much..

Thank you anyway though. I'm not very worrysome about spelling/grammar, but I guess I should step up my game for a Songwriting/Lyrics thread
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#4
I know you said it was inspired by the Offspring but it's a little too similar to Self Esteem for me.
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#5
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I know you said it was inspired by the Offspring but it's a little too similar to Self Esteem for me.

Yea, in retrospect, its a lot like Self Esteem. Although, he gets action in the fourth verse
Ill probably never bring this to fruition, just some little diddle I was thinking to myself
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#6
I liked it alot.
I think some of the lines went a bent off the rhythm, but nothing too bad, most of it flowed really well and I could feel a punk band going behind it. It seems like it'd be a really fun song man, if you record it let me know.