#3
I liked it, where are the vocals? that's one thing it needs are vocals. I can imagine John, Paul and George singing over it. It's really good.

What sort of chords are you using?
Bass Gear:

Mensinger: Speesy
Fender Precision 1989 (CIJ Rosewood)
Fender Steve Harris (CIJ)
Lakland J Sonic 5
Epiphone Explorer
Maruszczyk (custom) Jake

Ashdown CTM 100
#4
well my vocals arent anywhere close to those guys but i am working on some lyrics at the moment...i am gonna tab it out put it up I will send you a link when I am done with both...thanks for the feedback
#5
Thanks! are you going to be posting the lyrics on here?
Bass Gear:

Mensinger: Speesy
Fender Precision 1989 (CIJ Rosewood)
Fender Steve Harris (CIJ)
Lakland J Sonic 5
Epiphone Explorer
Maruszczyk (custom) Jake

Ashdown CTM 100
#8
I'd like to hear it again with the tone mellowed - the guitar sounds a bit stark for my taste.
I have become........comfortably numb
#10
agree with growing0, its almost painfully starchy / trebly. also the guitar sounds a little out of tune to me? but that could just be cause of how twangy it is as im not really sure the notes sound off so much as just the sound itself. i cant really offer any critique on the songwriting itself to be honest, it seems to be a melody driven song which we're hearing without the melody so it's pretty hard to take anything in context. maybe just slow it down a little so you can hit the notes more cleanly and reliably in time?
look forward to hearing with vox.