I don't know too much about rap myself but pretty good lyrics man! This song gives me a creepy vibe, it's actually pretty cool and creepy a bit. You should try creating your own beats or something one day.

Also man, me and my rapper friend wrote a song I'd be cool if you could check it out and give some input coming from a guy who raps. Check it out: https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1340747
Thanks, I've tried making beats myself but it's a little challenging for me lol. I'll hit up your song now.
Check for "Taking a Picture (Won't capture this)