#1
big foot, sasquipdalian
like the cigarettes in my mouth
that harbour my lips with 'all that jazz'.
but if we shall TRY-HARD and reminisce on such things
then i shall compare thy skull to an ashtray
so stained
and inconsequential
but alas here i am writing HACK! poetry
in the wind; perpeptual but yet forgotten
by the masses by dinner time
tea my dear?
but triumph was but a can of beer away,
oh such beverage, my
tongue can only taste such lucid
intoxications before proceeding
to thy urinating in the streets
like some kind of fag
(freaky alien genotype).
FABULOUS i say.
oh, woe is me a virgin
the divulgence of a nation.
I can already hear the ohs and the sighs
like an orgasm parade
as i walk across the streets
desperately trying to find my release
but i shall be having none
and my cigarettes shall remain blunt.
Last edited by Bleed Away at Jul 26, 2010,
#3
Quote by Bleed Away
big foot, sasquipdalian
like the cigarettes in my mouth
that harbour my lips with 'all that jazz'.

These first three lines are absolutely the most profoundest thing I ever read. "sasquipadalian" is liek James Joyce on concaine olololollol. And your use of the phrase, 'all that jazz', it's liek you're trying to prove a point. i feel you completely.

but if we shall TRY-HARD and reminisce on such things
then i shall compare thy skull to an ashtray
so stained
and inconsequential





TRY HARD????" That's so magnificent.


but alas here i am writing HACK! poetry
in the wind; perpeptual but yet forgotten
by the masses by dinner time
tea my dear?

OMGOOSHSOHSSH I lov yor use of extratemporal italicism in the "tea my dear?" line. It touches my heart as if only a stranger touched me.

but triumph was but a can of beer away,
oh such beverage, my
tongue can only taste such lucid
intoxications before proceeding
to thy urinating in the streets
like some kind of fag
(freaky alian genotype).

This is a perfect reflection on the state of modern life. I have never read a more precise description of doing my business in the street. And your mispelling of 'alien' is so avant-garde, i couldn't think of anything like that.

FABULOUS i say.

FABULOUS, I CONCUR!!11olol!!eleven!!!

oh, woe is me a virgin
the divulgence of a nation.
I can already hear the ohs and the sighs
like an orgasm parade

I love how edgy this is.


as i walk across the streets
desperately trying to find my release
but i shall be having none
and my cigarettes shall remain blunt.


This evening I have wept and laughed and felt liek I have never felt before. I want to have your children. Everything is so meaningful, so beautiful. I wish I could eat the fungus from between your toes, because I will nerev be as experimental and free as you and maybe doing that will make me kind of almost like that.
#4
thanks my dear. the italics part is SO EMOTIONAL, THAT I AM BEGGING MY AUDIENCE TO FEEL MY PAIN. I THINK THE NEW SPELLING OF 'ALIEN' IS A BIT TOO EXPERIMENTAL AND AVANT-GARDE FOR UG, I MEAN THEY ONLY LEARNED ABOUT 'SPACE-BUTTON PROBABILITY' TODAY, SO I WILL PROCEED TO CHANGIN' THAT TO THE MORE CONVENTIONAL WAY.

THANK YOU FOR READING
Last edited by Bleed Away at Jul 26, 2010,
#5
MY GOODNESS do I feel your pain. The way you've expressed everything is lovely. I also for to be doing the concur with your suggestion to refine this piece to be foring done to because it really is experimental, and some people might not get it, and they we'd have to explain to them that S&L isn't a place for writing songs and poems n stuff but just someplace to type at each other in boxes. olololol whoever thought of that??!/[0::!!
#7
manhattan? Blahahahaha That"s Hi*laryus You Should Be A Stand Up Comic/bratender/textifyer.

*bartender. Pardon the mispelling.
#23
ooooohohlololo111ooooooohhh! two pages ololoL!!O!KJLFSABCDEFGAEIOUQWERTYUIOIOP{}|//*-

Who do you think will be the WoTW? I think it should be you!!!!1