#1
A smile from your beautiful face
Is as artificial as your cold embrace
The words from your lips I traced
To the core of your bitter taste

I'll give up on this anytime
If I want to I'll always be fine
I'l give up on you and live my life
I can't believe, I, ever thought you could be
My faithful Wife

Maybe you should die in a car wreck
Maybe you should fall and break your neck
Maybe you'd respond to corporal punishment
Or maybe I, should send your whole family
Dirty pics you sent me


Just started on this last night, haven't really gotten far with it. I'll probably change a lot of it around as I add. This is just supposed to be a silly song, there isn't any meaning behind it.
#2
The last line doesn't fit. At all. I know exactly where youre coming from with the message, even if you say there isn't one. But in all honesty, the only part of this that really stood out was the first stanza. If you could write the entire thing with that sort of language, it would be an amazing peice. I look forward to seeing the finished article.


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#3
Quote by Pyrest
The last line doesn't fit. At all. I know exactly where youre coming from with the message, even if you say there isn't one. But in all honesty, the only part of this that really stood out was the first stanza. If you could write the entire thing with that sort of language, it would be an amazing piece. I look forward to seeing the finished article.


(if you want to c4c, links are in my sig.)

This.