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I’ve written so many words,
None of them mean anything anymore,
If I could show you it hurts,
You’d only enjoy it even more,
If I could trade it away,
I’d give up anything to take you,
If you’d have me today,
I swear I don’t know what to do,

So where’s the letter you burned?
Signed with hearts and “I love yous,”
Tell me the lesson I’ve learned,
Filled with hate and IOUs,

I’ve written so many songs,
About everything I see in you,
I hope no one sings along,
Won’t do what I tell you to,
If I could give them away,
They could have them, I don’t care,
If there was some other way,
I could look, but don’t know where,

So where’s the letter you burned?
Signed with hearts and “I love yous,”
Tell me the lesson I’ve learned,
Filled with hate and IOUs,

I love you, (It doesn’t mean anything,)
Sincerely,
It’s hard to, (It doesn’t mean anything,)
Believe me,
Regards to, (It doesn’t mean anything,)
The family,
I miss you, (You don’t believe anything,)
So badly,

So where’s the letter you burned? (Josie I know we’ve had our differences,)
Signed with hearts and “I love yous,”
Tell me the lesson I’ve learned, (Josie I hope you that I have changed since then,)
Filled with hate and IOUs,

So where’s the letter you burned? (Josie I wish you’d listen, what I’d have to say,)
Signed with hearts and “I love yous,”
Tell me the lesson I’ve learned, (Josie I wish that you would take me back today,)
Filled with hate and IOUs,
I wish that you would take me back today.


Critiscm would be nice.
#2
I'll assume this is heavily inspired by blink? Or is Josie and the triteness a mere coincidence?

I don't know. I can't see anything unique about it. No phrases, let alone words, jump out at me, there's nothing that indicates this is written above a freshman's level - and that's being generous.

Maybe consult a thesaurus...?

The only thing I could see that might go somewhere is IOUs, but I just don't know where it would go. Seems pretty banal, all in all.
the only people for me are the mad ones, the ones who are mad to live, mad to talk, mad to be saved, desirous of everything at the same time, the ones that never yawn or say a commonplace thing, but burn, burn, burn


#3
It's not so bad, I kind of like it thought it would alot better with more work ect like the poster above me said.

My favourite line is "If I could show you it hurts,
You’d only enjoy it even more," Hold onto that one