#1
Hello,

I just had an idea for something a couple of mins ago, and have just done a quick couple of layers of it.
Just one take each, so please no comments on the timing or technique or anything - Please can you tell me what you think of the idea? I particularly like the harmonies, although I know that's been a lot in the past. :S

C4C as always,
AJ
#2
The riffing is extremely generic, but it's a start. The leads were mediocre, and need a lot of work, and that last part definitely needs more substance than just power chord then random bend. Keep at it and you'll have a pretty decent song though.

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1344649

You, good sir, have not gone over to your friends house after a hard night of drinking to find 2 dudes passed out in the same room both holding their own flaccid cocks in hand, passed out, with porn on the tv.
#4
That's good. That means that you HAVE to change it. lol. Keep it the same, but instead of the bends, add a couple notes. Make it like a harmonized three note passage.

You, good sir, have not gone over to your friends house after a hard night of drinking to find 2 dudes passed out in the same room both holding their own flaccid cocks in hand, passed out, with porn on the tv.
#6
Cheers for the crit!

I think here you need to establish a main theme. A main idea that is the basis of the song. It can easy to establish something like that, at the minute it's various parts layered (which is the idea i know lol) but from here you should build, and arrange these layers to make something that moves somewhere and stays interesting!
#7
ank,
In the first 18 seconds, you keep hitting that high note. I found it quickly annoying, but if you like it, it's more important that you're happy with it than my opinion. Once the basic riff gets going after 18 seconds, I like it better. I basically like the Brian May harmony guitars at 0:50. Lead guitar sounds good in parts, but needs work. I think most of it has some potential. It certainly doesn't compare yet to the video you have on youtube. Please review my music I just posted yesterday at this link:

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1344496