#1
Just a little thingamajig I wrote during a tough time.Not much of poet and just looking for some crits on where I should start

Why must people drink?What makes you think;
Drinking that bottle to the excess is gonna solve
Any of your problems at all?

If your mind can't remember;cannot even recall
What was the point of having been there at all?.
lamenting in shame,In the blackness you hid
Piecing together all the bad that you did

That person you are and that thing you become
Is not who you are and is not really fun
It hurts those around you; the ones you most scare
Are Your friends and your family;the ones who sincerely care

overcoming your mistakes is no easy task
You can lighten your load,you need only ask
Listen to your heart;silence those fears
Put an end to every and all of those miserable tears

The bottles not the answer;never run back
That road will always lead right to pitch black
Fight hard and strong ,for as long as you do
We will never,ever give up *this* we promise you
#2
This piece reads really well. It has a good pace to it and gets your point across clearly.

I really like the first 2 lines of the second verse :

If your mind can't remember;cannot even recall
What was the point of having been there at all?.

One thing that I would say is that in this first bit :

Why must people drink?What makes you think;
Drinking that bottle to the excess is gonna solve
Any of your problems at all?

There are to many words ending in -ink for the first two lines and it kind of ruins the flow a bit.

The verses after that however flow nice and easily with that rhyming scheme.