#1
Hello. This is the completed product of my Opeth inspired song. Yes, I know it doesn't sound a ton like Opeth. They only inspired me to fuse my death metal background with others like post-hardcore and progressive rock... and even, PORN MUSIC. : ) haha.

The lyrical connotation of the song is quite simple. The lyrics and vocal approaches reflect the sound of the music that you hear. The reason why there's sudden change of moods and sounds in the song is a product of the pre-thought-up lyrical ideals.

The lyrics deal with a man who has recently lost the love of his life, at a young age. They had a great few years together and she suddenly dies of a marijuana induced coma. The song deals with a "return-fire" vocal style, as the lyrics are about the young man fighting off death out of respect for his loved one... and fights off his "internal grim reaper" but finds his troubles were worthless as he dies of a sudden heart attack due to the inhuman stress he was put under.

The heavy, evil or somewhat "false-uplifting mood" parts are triggered by the reaper and his efforts to condemn the young man. All clean, or mellow parts, or bi-polar verse's deal with the young man and his struggles to retain strength. The chorus relates to the young man's depression in the first chorus, and the second chorus is due to his sudden realization of death.

I tried to give you guys as much background as possible *shrugs* but idk if it would help you get a grip on some riffs, because I know plenty will disregard a few due to its "out of place" sound. But it sounds great with the lyrics and vocal follow through of my rhythm guitarist and myself. He being the "reaper" and I, the young boy.

Hope you enjoy, and as ever, C4C.

Song Length: 8 minutes 1 second
Attachments:
Following the Pain of Life and Death.zip
There will be zero tolerance
For the creator of hallowed intentions
There will be zero tolerance
Fate is your deciding God
#2
Before I crit, I'd just like to point out that weed doesn't actually induce comas.

The song's pretty cool. The riffs are all effective, although some of the transitions are a little odd. I felt that the bit at bar 93 went on for much too long, but other than that all the riffs work, and they convey the idea you wanted to get across. Good job.
#3
Quote by guitar_jew
Before I crit, I'd just like to point out that weed doesn't actually induce comas.

The song's pretty cool. The riffs are all effective, although some of the transitions are a little odd. I felt that the bit at bar 93 went on for much too long, but other than that all the riffs work, and they convey the idea you wanted to get across. Good job.

haha. I meant marijuana induced heart attack, but it doesn't matter. : )

Thank you.
There will be zero tolerance
For the creator of hallowed intentions
There will be zero tolerance
Fate is your deciding God
#5
Quote by BKGMorley
Are you a fan of the enslaved album Ruun? it sounds like it

Nope. I have never even listened to the band.

Is it a good thing that it sounds like it?
There will be zero tolerance
For the creator of hallowed intentions
There will be zero tolerance
Fate is your deciding God
#6
Alright, critting as I listen to it...

1-12 - I like the horror atmosphere you got going on here. It's really interesting. I'm liking the chords, and the drums on here. Gets a bit repetitive near the end of it though. Maybe add another element to the riff at the last repetition of that part.

13-28 - Really hard hitting, I liked the transition. The riff was really interesting. I liked the mood of it. Then when it switches, I loved the sort of danger feel it had. The fast guitar didn't really work at this part though, the notes felt wrong like it was being tried too hard. You don't always need fast notes to sound fast. Too fast just sounds bad.

29-46 - I liked the start riff here. Then when the full band comes in, it sounds very awesome. Double bass drums worked really well. Overall a very solid part. The fast guitars at this part worked pretty well.

47-60 - This part was nice. Kept the song interesting. Once again gave a nice danger feel to it. Clean guitar notes sounded a bit off at times though. The whole notes got kind of annoying near the end.

61-81 - The notes at this part sounded off. Overall I liked where you were going, but the notes just didn't seem to work out well in my opinion.

82-135 - I liked the start of this part. The clean guitars were really nice. Had a calming sense, gave it a nice atmosphere. Sort of coffee-shop feel. The whole notes at 92 were kind of annoying to be honest. Overall this whole section, personally I wasn't really feeling it. Just sounded kind of annoying.

136-150 - Like I said earlier about this part.

Overall you got a decent song going on. It was really interesting, some notes just sounded off and some parts sounded like they were being tried too hard. There were a lot of good parts, just a lot of annoying and repetitive parts too. Maybe it's just my personal opinion and taste though, other people might be into it.

C4C
#7
Quote by Sief9
Alright, critting as I listen to it...

1-12 - I like the horror atmosphere you got going on here. It's really interesting. I'm liking the chords, and the drums on here. Gets a bit repetitive near the end of it though. Maybe add another element to the riff at the last repetition of that part.

13-28 - Really hard hitting, I liked the transition. The riff was really interesting. I liked the mood of it. Then when it switches, I loved the sort of danger feel it had. The fast guitar didn't really work at this part though, the notes felt wrong like it was being tried too hard. You don't always need fast notes to sound fast. Too fast just sounds bad.

29-46 - I liked the start riff here. Then when the full band comes in, it sounds very awesome. Double bass drums worked really well. Overall a very solid part. The fast guitars at this part worked pretty well.

47-60 - This part was nice. Kept the song interesting. Once again gave a nice danger feel to it. Clean guitar notes sounded a bit off at times though. The whole notes got kind of annoying near the end.

61-81 - The notes at this part sounded off. Overall I liked where you were going, but the notes just didn't seem to work out well in my opinion.

82-135 - I liked the start of this part. The clean guitars were really nice. Had a calming sense, gave it a nice atmosphere. Sort of coffee-shop feel. The whole notes at 92 were kind of annoying to be honest. Overall this whole section, personally I wasn't really feeling it. Just sounded kind of annoying.

136-150 - Like I said earlier about this part.

Overall you got a decent song going on. It was really interesting, some notes just sounded off and some parts sounded like they were being tried too hard. There were a lot of good parts, just a lot of annoying and repetitive parts too. Maybe it's just my personal opinion and taste though, other people might be into it.

C4C

The parts sound less annoying when there's vocals in there. That's the only thing I don't like about GP5.. you can't get the vocals to help the atmosphere.

But thanks for the comment, sorry i didn't respond right away, just saw your post! Will get to it soon. Thanks!
There will be zero tolerance
For the creator of hallowed intentions
There will be zero tolerance
Fate is your deciding God