#1
Its probably going to change as I continue playing it over and over but here is a rough draft of it.


Don't you remember

Taking me fishing

When I was young


Don't you rememeber

Taking me for ice cream

Years ago


I don't remember

All the things you do

But I try to remember

Of all the memories of you


Don't you remember

All the movies

That we went to


Don't you remember

When you used to

Take me to the store


I don't remember

All the things you do

But I try to remember

All of the memories of you


Don't you remember

All the dinners

That we ate together


Don't you remember

Watching tv at night

Because I sure remember


I may not remember

All the things you do

But I try to remember

All of the memories of you
#2
I don't remember
All the things you do
But I try to remember
All of the memories of you

really love this part! keep up the good work!!
#3
Kinda weak for me,
Sometimes reminds me of "Father of Mine" by Everclear but in overall impression it's just not as good - try putting some more witty stuff like the last lines leafwhisper mentioned above to cut down this pop-tone of the song, some more creativity and it'd be good
#4
I must agree with burnberlinburn, this is kinda weak. I think you're way too repetative. I mean, the idea i guess is pretty nice, and i must also agree, with leafwhisperer, that stuff like

"I don't remember
All the things you do
But I try to remember
All of the memories of you"

..is nice. So keep that up. but you might wanna look over how you set it all up, and your wording. It has to be catchy you know, and fun to listen to. so..try to mix it up (: Hope I could help!



C4C?

https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1347783
#5
Ok thanks guys that really helps. I knew I had to change it yet I wasn't sure wear so thank you for all the help.