#1
C4C. a little cliche.

running in place,running in place,
building dreams and taking up space,
living in memory,living in memory
breathing in memory, breathing in memories.
keep your hands right by my side,
keep them where there meant to be,
keep your hands right by my side,
keep them where there meant to be.

keeping me right where I'm meant to be.
keeping me right where I'm meant to be.
keeping me right where I'm meant to be.
keeping me right where I'm meant to be.

What is this coming out my mouth,
running silence, consonants in my head,
feeling comatose, feeling comatose
nothing comes close, nothing comes close,
feeling comatose, feeling comatose
nothing comes close, nothing comes close
comatose my love, comatose my love
come collapse my love, comatose my love.

jogging in place,jogging in place,
getting caught up in instincts chase,
living in memory,living in memory
breathing in memory, breathing in memories.
keep your eyes right by my side,
keep them where there meant to be,
keep your eyes right by my side,
keep them where there meant to be.

keeping me right where I'm meant to be.
keeping me right where I'm meant to be.
keeping me right where I'm meant to be.
keeping me right where I'm meant to be.

What is this coming out my mouth,
running silence, consonants in my head,
feeling comatose, feeling comatose
nothing comes close, nothing comes close,
feeling comatose, feeling comatose
nothing comes close, nothing comes close
comatose my love, comatose my love
come collapse my love, comatose my love.

harder than an anvil, hitting the spot
iron stomach pukes, love sick shots
jumping of airplanes, landing your dreams,
right where I'm meant to be,
right where I'm meant to be,
right where were meant to be,
right where were meant to be.

What is this coming out my mouth,
running silence, consonants in my head,
feeling comatose, feeling comatose
nothing comes close, nothing comes close,
feeling comatose, feeling comatose
nothing comes close, nothing comes close
comatose my love, comatose my love
come collapse my love, comatose my love.
Quote by herby190
When I saw that, I thought of musical notes.... my elementary school teachers taught them as "tee-tees" "ta-tas" and a bunch of other nonsense....
#2
Nothing wrong with a good cliche if the music's right. I'm kind of getting a punk feel to this (80's) or some metal. Heck, I could imagine paramore doing this (sorry if that offends, but I like them). Even though the song is highly repetitive there are lines that just really jump out at you.

building dreams and taking up space
iron stomach pukes, love sick shots

I enjoyed those two lines a lot.

What is this coming out my mouth,
running silence, consonants in my head


This was my favorite part. Saying comatose as many times as you did was a little much, but hey some songs are like that.
#3
Quote by Partyboy2k05
Nothing wrong with a good cliche if the music's right. I'm kind of getting a punk feel to this (80's) or some metal. Heck, I could imagine paramore doing this (sorry if that offends, but I like them). Even though the song is highly repetitive there are lines that just really jump out at you.

building dreams and taking up space
iron stomach pukes, love sick shots

I enjoyed those two lines a lot.

What is this coming out my mouth,
running silence, consonants in my head


This was my favorite part. Saying comatose as many times as you did was a little much, but hey some songs are like that.


Yeah, I'm not really into any of those, It's more of a Smashing Pumpkins vibe to it, thanks for your crit mate
Quote by herby190
When I saw that, I thought of musical notes.... my elementary school teachers taught them as "tee-tees" "ta-tas" and a bunch of other nonsense....