#1
I know she isnt mine
I know she has a man
I know i cant let go
I will find this love

I cannot let this feeling go
She is stuck in my mind
She is the best there can be
No one better to find

I have a burning passion
I cant hold it in
I hurt when she says his name
I am not stopping now

I know she isnt mine
I know she has a man
I know i cant let go
I will find this love


Thats all I have for know. Please leave comments and feedback, thanks!
#2
Very nice. Sadly I can relate. Keep going with it.

Idea: on the "I know" stanza, I think a "But" at the beginning of the 4th line (But I will find this love) would give it more contrast and pop. Its your song so go with what feels right to you. Great job so far
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#3
great song i like how you use the I in all but 3 verses . the second verse is really ql cuz you have an I theh she and she , maybe try to start the no one netter to find whit an i so the form.

else it's perfect
#4
Thanks Clutch32192. I will do the, but i will find this love! I was thinking in the 3rd stanza 4th line i will put but i am not stopping now. And i will change the second stanza to match the "I" theme. Thanks again. And thanks as well Ic3.