#1
i forget how it felt
to craddle your soft form against me,
almost three years since
we were both too emotional
to shoot apples out of a barrel.
almost too close to tell what is was,
one blurry dream that went by so fast
we can't hold onto those halves and
puzzle pieces anymore, we can't
reopen closed out realities
fish bowls, marching bands,
sidewalks and cold grass.
if i could begin this day right,
you'd be waiting at the car
for the west coast.
#2
we were both too emotional
to shoot apples out of a barrel.
You could probably change "shoot" to 'bite." Just because I remember that the point of the game was to bite an apple out of the barrel, of course I could be wrong and if that's the case then go ahead and keep it.

Other than that, it was really good Keep on Writing
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