Hey man it's a good start, it just sounds like your throat is doing a lot of work, i'm not hearing a lot of resonance which is why it tends to sound whispery and lacking power. Start out with low growls and try to really get it resonating in your chest. Once you get that technique down then move on to your highs.

As always you need to be careful, read up on nodules and how to avoid them when screaming. You don't want to do yourself damage.
is the high screams something i should put on the backburner for a while and just work on the growls? and its true i dont "feel" a whole lot of resonance in my chest, i guess i still need to keep searching for the right technique huh