#1
This is my third song ever... c4c?

Sunset 07/03/10

Sitting alone,
And thinking about you,
I watch the sunset,
And wonder if you do too,

I sit and wait,
And wish for you,
Baby I know you want me to,

Baby watch the sun go down,
and everything will be allright,
Come on over and stay the night,
And everything will be just fine,

I wish you knew,
That every sunset,
I'm thinking of you,

Staring at the horizon,
I wonder if you see what I do,
And I wish I could ask you,

Baby watch the sun go down,
And everything will be allright,
Come on over and stay the night,
And everything will be just fine,

I'm always with you,
Even when I'm not there,
Tell me do you love me,
Do you even care,

Tell me now so I can walk away,
Walk into the sun,
Leave you now,
Before I come undone,

Come and tell me one day,
So we can watch the sunset together,

Baby watch the sun go down,
And everything will be allright,
Come on over and stay the night,
And everything will be just fine,

And everything will be just fine,
Everything will be just fine,
Watch the sun go down ,
And everything will be just fine,

Thanks for reading
#3
ok so i thought the whole song was very cliche but thats not a big problem but the thing is your saying the same thing again n again using different words. maybe try adding different emotion like wat does the person feel about you or maybe something else if you know wat im tryin to say. also i would suggest changing the last of verse1 like this

Sitting alone,
And thinking about you,
I watch the sunset,
do you see it too?

and i have some prolem with verse 3 as well. sorry im not usually this much of a crit so dont take it too seriously since im no good at writing songs myself and anyway this piece is waaaaaay better for being someones 3rd song ever so keep on writing
Roses are red
Violets are blue
I write poetry
And it sucks.