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Autumn Sun.

Im leaving august and finding autumn
Cause i know that shes the one
Watching leaves fall
And waiting for her call
Life would so much fun

Goodbye summer sun,
Your the only one
That makes me feel
Like I'm alive
The sun rises in the west
And sets in the east
Your beautiful,
To say the least

Goodbye summer sun,
Your the only one
That makes me feel
Like I'm alive
The sun rises in the west
And sets in the east
Your beautiful,
To say the least

The leaves fall to the ground
And all i hear is the sound
Of your heart beating slowly

Goodbye summer sun,
Your the only one
That makes me feel
Like I'm alive
The sun rises in the west
And sets in the east
Your beautiful,
To say the least

Lets rewind to last monday
And stay like that till sunday
When everything just felt so real
Fingers interlocked and intertwined
Four words
Will you be mine


Goodbye summer sun,
Your the only one
That makes me feel
Like I'm alive
The sun rises in the west
And sets in the east
Your beautiful,
To say the least

Your beautiful
Your beautiful
Your beautiful
To say the least
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The sun rises in the west
And sets in the east
Sun rises in the East, sets in the West :p Simple mistake, just swap the two lines

I actually really liked it. Cliche, but you told it truthfully so it worked out right. Play some good music and I'm sure it'll work Keep on Writing
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Did you want me to give you a critique?

Usually most works on here go without notice. Most of my favorites works still have not replys on them. And people tend to comment on pieces that are either short or interesting because it just takes far too much time to read these long semi-cliche works. And they also tend to comment on the pieces of people whom comment a lot on other's work. Just keep that in mind when posting in this forum.
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