#1
-Why the hell am I
Trapped in this place?
Doesn't even matter, all of the days
-I've spent in here,
Standing face to face
With this still unfamiliar palisade.
-Through the only
Window that you
Allowed me as my body grew.
-You shot at me
A twenty-two
Loaded with dogmatic lack of proof.


I'm tearing down these walls.
Just looking for something new.
To rebuild untold truths
Barred from me for all~~~
These years.
Substituted by the fears
You threw in here at me.
But no I couldn't see.


-Because the walls were not
Built for my own
Benefit but rather for my soul
-That you manipulated.
Even though I cried
So many drops of cyanide.


That couldn't melt these walls
When I looked for something new.
To rebuild untold truths
Barred from me for all~~~
These years.
Substituted by the fears
You threw in here at me.
But no I couldn't see.


-I ripped these walls
And tore right through
Six feet of imprisonment and cruel
-Punishment.
Now you're the fool
Ruined by counter-interaction that I groomed
-With your own comb,
In my own hair,
While I chose to write you this prayer.
-Now my vocal chords
Are drained and out
No more of your words are in my mouth.

But without these walls I fly.
Unhealthily I cry.
To nothing I will rise.
I've lost my sight tonight.
Because I no more have your eyes.
All I see is a white light.
As I look up at the sky.
Is this how I'm gonna die?
[music stops abruptly]


For the last stanza, the music will continuously get faster and chords get higher until it comes to a halt.
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My cover of Manchester Orchestra's "I Can Feel Your Pain"
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#2
I'd have to say this was hard to get around the wording of the lines. Some parts had a good flow to it and others, not quite. I'd have to say the chorus was the hardest part to get past.

With your own comb,
In my own hair,
While I chose to write you this prayer.
-Now my vocal chords
Are drained and out
No more of your words are in my mouth


I really did enjoy this though. This had great flow and was written pretty well. A lot of it seems to be a mouthful, but if its mainly with fairly fast music, I guess it wouldn't make a difference. I also thought the vocabulary in it was a nice touch.